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MLP: FIM - Without Magic - Part 1 (Edited) by PerfectBlue97 MLP: FIM - Without Magic - Part 1 (Edited) by PerfectBlue97
Please note, this comic was originally intended to be 10-15 pages long. The lack of lead up and detailed explanation on this page reflects the fact that the comic was supposed to be a lot shorted and simpler than it ended up being.

EDIT: I've had a some people react quite badly to this comic. Some even found it a little distressing that I've taken Twilight's horn away (Wounded veterans have been been mentioned in the comments).

When I first wrote this comic, my vision was that this was an academic exercise set by Celestia to help Twilight to better relate to other ponies, as well as to better understand herself. So I've updated the text to clearly state that this fact.

I've also tidied up the page a little. Still the original vectors, though.

This edit means that some of the following pages might sound a little odd.

Original Description

I know that it doesn't look much, but this is my most ambitious Pony comic to date. I've tried to use as many original components as I can (Inkscape and Photoshop), but you might recognize some old favorites from other (more talented) authors.

This comic was inspired by the episode Winter Wrap-Up, where Twilight tries to get by without using her Magic, but in the end she uses it even though she isn't supposed to.

Princess Celestia sent Twilight to Ponyville in order to get to know other ponies, and to discover life outside of her books and magic, but in most episodes she seems to solve problems using books and magic.

Twilight solved three simple problems with magic, that any Earth Pony could have solved using their hooves. She used her magic instinctively.

Princess Celestia wants her to find a way to do things without using magic, and to see things from other pony's perspectives.

She's not being cruel (and this is supposed to be the "real" Celestia). She's trying to help Twilight to explore the other things that make Twilight Sparkle who she is.

Anything that isn't directly attributed to somebody is either based on an image from the show's advertizing material for the show, or is scratch drawn (Some things are a combination of the two). I didn't use General Zoi's Pony Creator for any of this (yay).

As you can see from the “Cyclops” pony in frame 7, I'm still getting to grips with Inkscape, and Ponies in general.

Twilight Sparkle's Cutie Mark is by Grendo11 (grendo11.deviantart.com/art/Tw…)

Part 2: perfectblue97.deviantart.com/a… (Updated version)
Part 3: perfectblue97.deviantart.com/a…
Part 4: perfectblue97.deviantart.com/a…
Part 5: perfectblue97.deviantart.com/a…
Part 6: perfectblue97.deviantart.com/a…
Part 7: perfectblue97.deviantart.com/a…

Frame 1, Scootaloo's expression is based on this image (bobthelurker.deviantart.com/ar…). Frame 3 and 4: Background (gameguy001.deviantart.com/art/…). Frame 5: Rainbow Dash is Angry Rainbow Dash by 90Sigma (90sigma.deviantart.com/art/Ang…). Derpy's Cutie Mark is by Ooklah (ooklah.deviantart.com/art/Cuti…). Frame 6: The background is from the show itself. Frame 7: Background is Library Upper Floors (Twilight's Bedroom) by DaringDashie (daringdashie.deviantart.com/ar…). Frame 8: Sorry, I'm being really lazy here. This is from the show itself. I wonder how Celestia is writing that letter without using her magic (no glow?). Frame 9: This one is based on a couple of different images. Including Veggie55's Rainy Days (veggie55.deviantart.com/art/Ra…) and Library Upper Floors (Twilight's Bedroom) by DairingDashie (daringdashie.deviantart.com/ar…). I used them both as a base. One for the window and the other for the curtain, along with some tweaks. Also based on the original image from the show. Frame 10 and 11: Same as above. Frame 12: Same as Frame 8. Frame 13 and 14: Same as Frame 9.
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Dr-wolf-girl Featured By Owner Dec 4, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
my cuz will love this :P
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Setakarn Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2016
Now she wont be an alicorn when celestia gives her wings! HAPPY ENDING
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PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That's 2 seasons in the future.
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Zadam101 Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2016
I heard about this comic from a friend who would not shut up about how horrible it was and as well as some comments about you. Nothing kind. So I thought I'd read this and maybe calm him down or something that might shut the guy up. I will try to keep in mind that this is your story and try to be helpful with my comments.

That said, this opening will turn many people away. First off, how is what Twilight did any different than what any other unicorn does on a daily bias? Hopefully this will be answered in the story. Second, this seems extremely out of character for Celestia. Usually her lessons are created when there is an outside force like Sombra, Nightmare Moon, or a dragon. Also this feels very, very dickish for her to do to Twilight and just feels...wrong. Both of this will most likely turn heads and create haters if those people like either or both, but it does make others curious enough to continue, I just hope Celestia has a damn good reason for doing this
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PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
When I wrote the first page the comic was going to be about 15 pages long.

It was going to end soon after talking to Applejack, so the first page represents an earlier version of the comic.
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Zadam101 Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2016
So you don't see a problem with what Applejack does later?
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PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm largely basing the characters on what they would do in Season 1 and 2, and this includes making some of the same kind of mistakes that they would make.

Applejack is "Apple Buck Season", "Last Roundup" and "Over a Barrel" Applejack.

She doesn't always do the best possible thing.
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Zadam101 Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2016
It just feels like you focus more on the flaws on a character overall rather than their good points.
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:iconperfectblue97:
PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
It's not a feel-good comic.

Many of the best episodes were ones that concentrated on a character's flaws. Twilight DOES have good things about her in this comic, but they don't come in until about page 130.
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Zadam101 Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2016
I see. Then maybe I'll start reading it then.

If I may be so bold, this is what I think is the reason I hear so much hate from this comic, its taking too long for Tina to be Twilight. The good things are so rare and far between that it became a tedious read for me. Well, more like Tina's dumb choices for me but my friend rages with anger every day because of how long its taking saying you are doing this just to drag the character through the mud because you hate her and plan on doing something sick in the sequal. I think he's going a bit overboard but this is just what I'm getting.

If I do decided to keep reading this I will give constructive critisiusm unless you ask me to stop.
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PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
There are a handful of people putting out some rather inconsistent hate because my comic doesn't meet their head-canon of Twilight, or because they don't like Celestia.

The people who have encouraged me to continue outnumber them 100-1.

The fact that you actually experience "rage" over this comic tells me that you have an internal dialog going on that exists outside of what I'm writing. There isn't anything in my comic that should produce emotions that strong.
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matt-flameboymallon Featured By Owner Jul 8, 2016
It funny that Twilight is happy to help the little foals but annoyed at Derpy (how many times is this?)
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TrinsyCCC Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2016
LOL omg xDDD
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Steampunk-Brony Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2016   General Artist
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:iconperfectblue97:
PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yay.
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CardmasterWild Featured By Owner Apr 28, 2016  Hobbyist Artist
Now Scoots knows what it's like to be Charlie Brown
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PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Maybe I should have made it a Kite Eating Tree?
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CardmasterWild Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2016  Hobbyist Artist
It's fine the way it is
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alvaxerox Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2016
well discord did took away her horn last time.
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PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Apr 16, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
In one of the recent comics, a group of Unicorns actually CUT Rainbow Dash's wings off.
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TheSequentialArtMan Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2016

"It gladdens my heart"?

really?

try "It warms my heart"

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:iconperfectblue97:
PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Too sentimental.

Celestia is a mentor, rather than a proud parent.
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TheSequentialArtMan Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2016
still seems like a grammer error
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:iconperfectblue97:
PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nope, it's 100% grammatically correct.

It's an old fashioned phrase, you hear it in classical literature.
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TheSequentialArtMan Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2016
do you have a youtube channel?
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:iconperfectblue97:
PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I had one a long time ago but it wasn't pony related.
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woonjy2011 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2016
Wow, a comic being drawn for over 4 years? So amazing! Probably the best one i've ever seen. I hope you do this thing again! Actually anything you draw should be great! <3
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PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Well, I took a big break in the middle.

I'm managing to get 1 page done per week at the moment, but when I started it was every 2-3 weeks, so I've picked up the pace a bit.
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woonjy2011 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2016
Anyway i'm happy that it continued for over 4 years. I haven't seen something like this. Twilight even became an alicorn during that time heh?
And I love the story. That trixie one was great.
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woonjy2011 Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2016
And I see some guys being too serious- just a comic about Twilight losing horn and having some adventures(or maybe knowing something other than magic, but anyway), isn't it? I hope they don't take it so seriously. Such scenes like Twilight crying were actually so cute! :>
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kawaiipotatolove Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2016
Celestia?! What the freak?
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Kema--Nafe Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2016   Digital Artist
lol
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Kalenz123 Featured By Owner Edited Mar 9, 2016
I came around a random page of your comic and it looked very interesting. However when seeing the 1st page I must agree with the distressed people who complain about the horn thing. For one this is some major trolling by Celestia which borders on downright betrayal which I dont think she would do. Twilight's special talent is magic. For her horn to be taken away is the same as taking away the eyes of an artist or the ears of a musician or the hands of a sculptor (or the hands of any human really). Especially this over relaxed attitude Celestia has. She doesn´t bother to inform Twilight up front ruining any plans she might have, doesn´t give her time to prepare doesn´t discuss and explain her reasons. Just REMOTLY taking one of Twilight's most important parts of her very being away. From a teachers perspective that one action is wrong on so many levels.. You should have build up to that point a bit more and not rush it into 1 page.
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PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Maybe you should read page 44 (perfectblue97.deviantart.com/a…).
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Kalenz123 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2016
So? I never said it couldn´t be a valuable lesson for Twilight. I said Celestia's approach was just completely wrong. Maybe you didn´t read my comment through.
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PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I'm a little concerned about some of the words that are being thrown around in the comments. One of the big issues that I've been having are people reacting to this as if a real life teacher had taken an axe to a real life student, and had permanently mutilated them out of some psychotic delusion that it would help their studies.

Is it really appropriate for somebody to be "distressed" over what is in effect a badly drawn fan comic based on a cartoon for 8 year old girls, where a Unicorn loses its magic\horn for a couple of days?

You're talking about blinding people, or mutilating them. Other people have used far more extreme wording. I've had people talking as if I this was a some kind of graphic Cupcakes meets Human Centipede gore comic.

Celetsia is essentially using the same spell on Twilight that Discord used in the Season 2 two part episode. My story is basically just Winter Wrapup where Twilight can't use her magic, rather than her trying not to use it.

Worse things have been done in the actual canon comic. There is one issue where Rainbow Dash is drugged and has her wings wings off with magic. Their intent is that she will never get them back. Here, Twilight knows that she will get her horn back. She's shocked rather that scared.

Yes, there is no lead up. The reason for that is that the comic was only going to be about 10 pages long. It was essentially going to just be Twilight's argument with Applejack, and then one page for each of the Mane characters. Then she realizes what makes her special outside of magic and gets her Cutie Mark and horn back.
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Shenronn Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2016  Hobbyist General Artist
Trollestia everypony
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bensacche Featured By Owner Jan 30, 2016  Student Filmographer
AWESOME!!! :D
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askwasteali Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2016
Ali: AHHH COME ON! At least give her wings you du***bag. How it feel I take your immortality.
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XxmaskedponyxX Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2016
Correction, it has been debunked in the Journal of the Pony sisters that Celestia and Luna aren't immortal, but age differently then other ponies.
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Supafoxxeh Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
I've read this comic before and I can't remember what happened...

     ...but Princess Celestia, I must say, in my most sincere respect...

     ...and with the well-being of all inhabitants of your world in mind...

     ...I think this is the most stupid, stupid, STUPID thing you have
ever casually done in Equestrian history. Without Unicorn magic,
Equestria would have probably been incinerated by dragons or died
of dysentery and disease by now, and without the abilities of
especially talented Earth Ponies, Unicorns, Pegasi, and Alicorns
throughout history, Equestria would probably look like the heap
of scorched sh*t its inhabitants died wallowing around in.
     Twilight Sparkle has already earned her cutie mark and should
be able to continue improving life in Equestria to the best of her
exceptional magical abilities without your self-righteous interference.
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PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2016  Hobbyist Digital Artist
In her defense, Celestia didn't envision Twilight overeating like this.

Celestia thought that Twilight would have her cutie mark back in a couple of days.

When I started writing this, that was the plan.

The entire span of this comic was going to be about 15 pages, covering 3 days.
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Supafoxxeh Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
PerfectBlue, this comic is your ultimate destiny. Through it, you receive immortality.
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Supafoxxeh Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2016  Hobbyist Writer
     ...This is the one thing about Celestia that makes her the least favorite of the princesses,
if we exclude Twilight Sparkle, the "Princess of Friendship" and "Queen of Characters Who
Have Become So Dominant and Uninteresting that I Try to Ignore Them."
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guardmn Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2015
This is gonna be interesting.
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CaptRiskyBoots Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2015  Student Digital Artist
:icontrollestia3plz: Umad Twi?
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Ajedi32 Featured By Owner Edited Dec 19, 2015
I don't know, this seems kinda weird to me. It'd be like taking away Rainbow's ability to fly or Rarity's ability to design dresses and saying it's to help them "find out what else makes you special". Sure there are other things that make her unique, but magic is Twilight's special talent, and there's nothing wrong with her relying on it to solve her problems. (Though obviously raw magical talent can't solve every problem. Magic Duel, taught that problem pretty well.) Honestly this feels like something Discord would do, not Celestia.

I also find it a bit hard to believe that Celestia has the ability to remove ponies' horns and cutie marks via letter. Starlight would have loved that ability. ;-)

I think the premise isn't actually that bad, but the way it was set up definitely could have been done better. At the very least I think a bit more build-up beforehand and less abruptness in the way Celestia handled things would have helped a lot here.

But whatever, this comic is three years old and I'm sure you've improved lots since you started. Maybe I'll give it a shot...
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PerfectBlue97 Featured By Owner Dec 20, 2015  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Imagine if a young Rarity started buying in pre printed dress making patterns, and used them all of the time.

She might make her dresses faster, but she wouldn't improve as a fashion designer. She'd just be making the same dresses over and over again using different colors of fabrics.

Wouldn't it make sense for her mentor to take away the dress making patterns, and to set her a task that involved making something from scratch?

I basically needed a premise and an execution that I could fit on a single page, without having to draw too many complicated scenes. I'd probably put it across three pages if I were drawing it again.
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LupinKurt Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2015  Student General Artist
wow, celestia is a bigger d*ck than I thought
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JamieLucas Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2015
Dude, she gets the chance to learn what makes her special besides her magic. It does make perfect sense and I think that twilight would have acted upon such differently than she did.
Although Celestia is better than Luna any day, I know that Luna is just a spoiled brat little sister. I would have expected Luna to do the same thing, actually.
Honestly, I don't know why you get so riled up and defensive over such pony nonsense. I don't even like the show because the "fans" have ruined it so much for me. With 'shipping' and trying to make something in the story out of nothing, or hardly anything.
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